中考英语书面表达范文赏析

　　例1：

　　随着阳光体育运动在全国开展，政府对中学生身体素质有所下降这个问题给予了高度重视，提出了这样的标语：“EXERCISE ONE HOUR A DAY, KEEP ILLNESS AWAY”。同学们参加了各种体育锻炼之后，校园里出现了可喜的变化，强身健体，增强了学习效果，校园生活丰富了。请你报道一下学校开展这一活动的情况。

　　注意：1.词数80—100左右。

　　2.要求文章结构合理、内容通顺、句子连贯。

　　参考词汇：build up one’s body strength强健身体

　　reduce diseases减少疾病

　　构思方法：

　　1.认真阅读、理解和思考题目中给出的所有信息点。信息点是围绕着提示从文字中扣出来的。

　　2.这个题目的信息点应该是：

　　a.阳光体育；

　　b.政府重视中学生身体；

　　c.提出的标语；

　　d.参加了各种体育锻炼；

　　e.有利于强身健体；

　　f.增强了学习效果；

　　g.校园生活丰富了。

　　写作方法：

　　1.安排以上信息点在文中的逻辑关系。

　　2.用所掌握的词汇、词组、固定句型将所有信息点表现在文章中。(the Sunny Sports, pay attention to the health of the students, raise the slogan, take part in the exercise, build up one’s body strength, reduce diseases, make study effective, school life, colourful)

　　3.文章最后加入个人评价(观点)。

　　下面是学生的作文：

　　(1)

　　As the Sunny Sports is developing in our country, the government has paid attention to the health of the students and raised, "EXERCISE ONE HOUR A DAY, KEEP ILLNESS AWAY". So far our school life has changed a lot. Now we have more time to do sport in the morning or after school. We play football, basketball, badminton and swim. They let our brains relax and make our school life more colorful. We have become more energetic. Above all our study has all been improved.

　　Let’s take exercise every day. It can build up our body strength and reduce diseases.

　　(2)

　　Doing sport builds up our body strength and reduces diseases.

　　Though we lead a better life, our health is becoming worse now. So "EXERCISE ONE HOUR A DAY，KEEP ILLNESS AWAY" has been raised by the government.

　　At noon or after school we play ball games, swimming and running. Look!The playground seems smaller because lots of students are playing on it.The school life has become colorful and we are energetic.As a result we study harder and better.

　　The Sunny Sports has brought an exciting change to us. Let’s keep on doing it.

　　这是两个学生的习作，他们分别以独特的思路和风格，利用丰富的词汇、准确的时态、简单句和复合句的搭配、合理的构思使文章语言流利，一气呵成，展现了扎实的英语语法功底和综合运用能力。

　　例2：

　　健康对于我们每个人来说是非常重要的，但你的父母天天忙于工作而忽略了这个问题，你很为他们担忧。请你以此为话题，并结合提示给他们写一封信。

　　提示：1.要走路去上班，而不是开车或坐车；

　　2.每周至少去体育馆锻炼一次，或打球、或游泳；

　　3.饮食要健康；

　　4.不要工作太晚，要早休息。

　　要求：1.短文结构完整，意思连贯，语言流畅，语法准确，符合逻辑；

　　2.80—100词左右；

　　3.开头和结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数。

　　构思方法：

　　1.找到信息点。

　　2.这个题目的信息点应该是：

　　a.作为儿(女)担忧父(母)的身体状况；

　　b.上班最好步行；

　　c.每周至少一次到体育场馆从事体育锻炼(球类运动、游泳等)；

　　d.健康的饮食；

　　e.早睡不熬夜。

　　写作方法：

　　1.首先要谈到对父(母)的身体状况担忧。

　　2.然后引出希望父(母)怎么做。

　　3.作为小辈向父母提出建议和要求时，要注意语气，不可以命令。

　　4.注意信的写作格式。

　　学生的作文：

　　(1)

　　Dear Dad(Mum),

　　You’re so busy every day that you don’t pay much attention to your health. I’m worried about your health all the time. I’d like to give you some suggestions. I hear walking is the best sport. Your company isn’t far from home, is it? Why not walk to the office? You’d better take exercise at least once a week, such as playing tennis in the gym. Going to swim is also a nice choice, too. What’s more, it’s necessary to have healthy food. Try not to stay up too late. Having enough sleep can help your brain work better.

　　Dad, please accept my advice. I really wish you healthy!

　　Your loving son (daughter)

　　Tom (Mary)

　　(2)

　　Dear Dad(Mum),

　　You’re so busy every day that you don’t pay much attention to your health.I am worried about you. I hope you can keep healthy. You often drive to your office. It is not far.What about walking there because it can make you much stronger?I’d like you to play basketball or go swimming in the gym at least once a week. It is important to eat healthy food such as vegetables, meat, eggs and fruits. Though your work is hard, I still hope that you can go to bed early so that you can get enough sleep.

　　I’m looking forward to receiving your letter.

　　Your loving son (daughter)

　　Tom (Mary)

　　这两篇作文使用了I’d like to…，Why not…?It is important to do…,Try not to do…,I hope that…,What about doing…?I’d like you to do…,You’d better do…等婉转口气的请求句式，表达出了作者对父(母)的关心，信息点完整，内容充实，注重了书信的结尾形式。